[Todd]

Page one

Panel one- (Leave a bit of space for the title sequence. It should be “Wicket W. Warrick and the clone to being awake again.” with a small space for the credits.


Panel two- Large establishing shot. It is almost twilight and the sky is darkening on the desert moon “Partan”. (Note. For the sake of simplicity I have just made this place up. Creative freedom is welcome.) The landscape is sparse with jutting rock and dunes as far as the eye can see. We see that it is battle-torn with huge robotic figures fighting against other robotic figures. In the background we can see Episode two Federation ships fighting precursors to the Tie fighters. The sky is full of lasers and burnt out ships. In the distance we can see a type of star destroyer in flames about to crash-land. In the foreground we can see the outline of a small figure. This is the Ewok Wicket W. Warrick. He is holding a light saber and is in full attack mode. He is surrounded by Destroyer and Battle droids. We also see that a battle rages within our range of view. We can see many Jedi fighting on foot, doing what Jedi do best. Throughout this sequence we should see laser blasts from the droids flying about.

Panel two- A close up of Wicket with a grim look of determination. He’s in Jedi pose. We can see shadows of deadly droids sneaking up behind him.

Panel three- Wicket has turned around quickly to slice the droids to pieces. He almost seems to be smiling as he does it.

Panel four- Off in the distance we can see a power source. It is a globe nestled in a hub of machinery and wires that is giving off an electrical source we can see. The globe is about twenty feet in diameter and is on a platform with eight robotic legs (similar to spiders) moving the power source with the battle. Wicket sees this with recognition in his eyes. The space from Wicket to the globe is covered with Battle droids, all in somewhat rough shape. We can tell from the landscape and the scars of the droids that this has been a long battle.

Panel five to seven- Five, six and seven are all small shots of Wicket making his way to the globe. He is kicking much droid butt. It could be played as a slow motion type sequence or complete snapshots of each strike. On panel seven we should see the globe within 20 feet of the last of the fallen droids.

Panel eight- An over the back wide shot of Wicket with his arms out, surprised by the size and magnitude of the globe and its machinery. He seems surrounded by robotic legs. Underneath the globe machine we can see that there is a small area where the glob is jutting out, as if the mechanical portions of the transport were a type of doughnut. This area shouldn’t be more than a couple of feet in diameter.

Panel nine- A tiny panel spotlighting this weakness in the globe.


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[Todd]

Unfortunately Cruz had to drop from the tournament so animemandy gets a free ticket to the Finals! (well I wouldn't say free because she did a helluv a job on her piece).

Topic will be closed Thursday March 31.

From the man who wrote the script:

steph

Okeedokee.

I really like the idea of Wicket looking down overtop this huge valley of warring ships. Nice touch.

Panel three looks pretty cool. I like this idea of sitting in battlepose the way that jedi do. Good pose.

The layout of the page is somewhat stifling. I think it might have helped for you to work off of a grid type system. The flow is a bit clunky.

I love that choice for the closeup of the eye. Nicely done. I didn't realize that there were droids around him until that panel. I would have made a birds eye view in the panel before to acertain that.

In panel six you seem to have him attacking nothing. I would have put a droid or two in there.

Panel nine is great. This is really what I was invisioning it. Great work.

Panel ten should have been an insert with some sort of darker panel around it to make it pop. As it is, it hides in the page when it should come forward.

Overall, nice work.

(note: sorry for messing up that panel two/panel three thing and in doing so, bumping up the panel count. I'll do better next time. )

Steph

[animemandy]

Wish Cruz could have made it. I hated to take this by default. I would still like any comments though so I can improve. Thanx..............

[Oakland]

Very awesome Mandy! I love your take on the little guy. I see you're alsoa shader like me.

Besides the panels of him slashing being hard to follow (more in shape of hte panel than content of hte panel) i thought this to be a strong piece...

nice work and i'm sorry it had to be by default too.

-Oakie

[JDcunard]

very nice mandy

But I wish there was some space between panels. Kinda get confussing in certain areas...

Also I suggest some strong bold line. You got to if you wanna beat Oakland.

[the fat kid]

yeah i just think on the panel with the eye reflection you might need to show more texture maybe with some fur or something to maybe point out that its an eye more, i didnt notice that thats what is was until maybe last or something then again im partly retarded with a chance of a.d.d. so take it with a grain of salt.

[Todd]

yeah mandy my only grip is the panel seperation. Needs a little for definition so eveything doesn't bleed together.

I also must say out of the three entries, yours reminds me most of the wicket from the movie.

other than that sorry you didn't have competition, but you did a spectacular job and I wish you luck in the final round.

If you want to say anything to mandy or any of the contestants for that matter do it here.